High up in this lookout
I keep my privacy and pledge
Nightfall’s my guest
And as if basking
in that reflected glory
You pretend
While I defy
And get loose and lost
In that imperfect accordance
of you
with one another
Observing me
Like flakes at times
Flames at others
About to fall down on my serenity
So as to freeze my intelligence
Or maybe
burn my nescience.
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burn my nescience.
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posted for OpenLinkNight @ d'verse
22 comments:
i had to stop and look up nescience...ignorance...wish i could burn mine at times...fall down on my serenity is an interesting line as well depending on how you interpret...nice dance tonight dulce..
I must say, I always love visiting the Pub, I find so many wonderful poets who I had been missing out on and you are one of them. SO happy to have found you. I adore your words and your blog in its entirety is a rose! Lovely penning!
Kellie
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/11/22/hard-cider/
Terrific write! I love "get loose and lost."
love love love this one! i can't even pick one favorite line, i love them all!
That image is powerful! And your poem ... wow. The last 7 lines blew me away:
"Observing me
Like flakes at times
Flames at others
About to fall down on my serenity
So as to freeze my intelligence
Or maybe
burn my nescience."
The title you chose for this is just perfect. Nice imagery.
getting loose and lost In that imperfect accordance of you..what beautiful image dulce...and sometimes our ignorance stands in the way or just our normality..
My privacy is definition of 'my isolation'...and nobody shall really know of my promise but one.
I believe those stars are more perfect than imperfect. Otherwise, how do they not collide with one another--with US!
Is defiance a part of your pledge, that promise to yourself?
I like this part near the ending...flakes vs flames, and freeze vs burn. Still that "Dulce dichotomy" I'm noticing.
By far this is one of your better writings, even so short as it is. I am constantly amazed at the poetry you dish out this past year--or two--or three?
Worthy of a book--others do it, some not nearly so talented with words. And you are not even English!!! Using words which have some of us (me) going for our dictionaries--NESCIENCE...grin!!!
I am in complete admiration, Ms Dulce
Thank you!
Yep, you're a real Peep!
Great write. Excellent movement and flow and what an amazing finale here. thanks
Beautiful. well structured and balanced. teeming with (not nescience!) but resonant smarts.
I'm simply impressed. thanks for sharing this.
I love this, Dulce. :)
Yes ignorance truly should burn in many, even all at times. Another wonderful verse.
intriguing picture and post... i like my privacy, even in imperfect accordance...nice one ~
I had to look up nescience too. I like the duality in this.
The word nescience has been used in out Hindu Spirituality a lot.. so did not have to look it up. It has lots of meaning within meaning for us...
and you have done a good job in using the word at the end, making use of its full gamut of meaning.. Lovely...
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-sighs.html
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beautiful use of words :)
Beautiful poem. I admire people who can write. I have no creativity or imagination. I can make cakes but not creative ones or beautifully decorated, I have no patience (and no talent) I found you at my friend gypsywoman and I'm following you from Rome.
Beautiful poem. I admire people who can write. I have no creativity or imagination. I can make cakes but not creative ones or beautifully decorated, I have no patience (and no talent) I found you at my friend gypsywoman and I'm following you from Rome.
"So as to freeze my intelligence
Or maybe
burn my nescience."
Wonderful ending...I so love learning new words, thanks :)
exquisite as always dear Dulce!
I had to look up nescience too! Beautiful write!
Anna :o]
Phew! Dulce, you made me work on this one. I had to read it a couple of times and like it each time more. I agree with Steve E. Beautiful talent.
Each line said something to me, might not be what others took out of it and that makes it even better, doesn't it?
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