A Walk in The Clouds, by Missunfortunate (Deviantart)
There you are
All of you and I
Unique actual observer
Making shapes, you
Trying to convey
What right now, I
Can into words
State, translate
All of you and I
Today you are picturing
The whole World map
So clear
Subtly…
Africa becomes a huge dragon
Whose mouth
Opens wildly
To eat America
Which escapes
Wings open
Right towards Hawaii
(Although those were
Not there before…)
Until
it completely vanishes
Into a free transparent layer
And the Italian boot
Is now a claw, huge
Approaching
As if wanting to
Kick Spain
Which flies up
To Greenland
And so on…
Until
Eventually
Venus shines back
Beside Sister Moonshine
And
Winks at me
Good night.
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Posted for One Shot Wednesday
39 comments:
*wink*
I think clouds show us what we need to see... A boot to you could be a gun to someone else.
A gun...a boot? sorry...
See no connection betwwen those at all!
violent minds don't need to see that in clouds... I doubt they even look up at the sky.
Shame...
i certainly pictured the world map as i was reading this. amazing creativity!
enjoyed this very much
thank you
How i love this..Too sweet..Dulce! winking back ;)
i so wish the clouds would go away soon..........hugs..
ha. lovely trip around the world and all about you translating the two of you...intense imagery...
Venus and moon-sister so far and near. Wink and snore the same. good night.
C
Hey, Dulce, thank you for coming over to see me last week. It has been a while for both of us to visit. I'm glad I came today to read this poem. There is depth and maturity here, and those amazing images too. It is not a poem just about cloud watching. You really sing here. Rock on!
what a trip around the world and to the universe and back...loved it
Used to make my sister look at the clouds for hours by making up stories about the different shapes in them. Reminded me a lot of childhood. Thanks for sharing
Whimsical...makes me smile!
Fun to read the geography come to life through transformation and interaction. Imaginative and has a nice flow to the short lines. smiles
Sounds like somebody was pondering a globe on a sleepless night. Fun images and a fun read, Dulce.
African becomes a huge dragon...what a line..One shot
I love the game that seems to be played by the cosmos - in a flash
a wonderful fantasy Dulce
moon smiles and *wink*
Funny how we all see poems so differently. I thought this was a game with parent and child imagining a world both real, fantastical, and cosmic. It was a "sweet" adventure.
Thanks, Gay
Charming! I "heard" this as a children's story, read at bedtime and opening the door to dreamy trips around the world.
Me llevo todo tu brillo, seguro te llega de Venus.
Buenas noches bonita.
I loved the shape-shifting in this...from the world to the land of dreams. Lovely!
The cosmic imagery lends a universality to your close relationship. Playful and endearing.
Great imagery
Totally agree with ,Brian.Had a lovely trip.
I wish I could take the journey.
Beautiful tour of the planet and a wink good night....what a dream through reality...one the same...sleep well ...lovely one shot...bkm
Exotic, flowing, romantic.
I had people tell me, 'Get your head out of the clouds" thanks for taking me there. Great One Shot. Loved the images of animals and countries
Reads like a fantastical lullaby. Sweet dreams! :)
love that photo
nicely crafted poem works well
I'm always blown away by your posts and the look of your blog. So artistic.
wouldnt it just be great if geography could be taught like that at school...a class of juniors all laying on their backs exploring the clouds....great piece...cheers pete
Interesting views... with images and thoughts that are bordering on political... enjoyed your take on the world map...
Thanks for sharing..
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Om Namah Shivaya
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I feel as if i have been on a lovely vacation around the world Dulce...i think this is another favorite for me! :-)
Liked the images...wonderful poetry!
certainity of the uncertainity
I love the images in the clouds, and like your poem, if you allow yourself to be still and wait they open up to endless possibilities...
This is fun ... I enjoyed it.
Great flight of imagination...cosmic!
Victoria
Interesting writing!! I felt layers of weatherly travel, and the comfort of night in the depiction of planets and sky, hovering in space! Nice! ~April
¡Devuélvele el guiño!
Lujazo leerte cielo. Un abrazo!!
Those opening stanzas Dulce,
I see someone in my mind
standing, staring, hair whipping in the wind, observing, and mouthing those very words.
WOW!
Insane imagery, I love it!
A beautifully worded bite and chunk of love that you push out into this world...
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