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Saturday, June 19

NOT INCLINED


On the window sill

I lean

In waiting

As time goes by

Minutes grow high




You’d give me

Anything

To keep the flame alive

Now

Waiting

Time has stopped

And


You say

Need to see my eyes

Look into them

In search for the answer

Why so much love

What is it I have

That drives you so mad



Flattered

As I might

I say

No idea hun

Don’t know

This is new to me



I used to be

One of those

Who lies

And leans

In waiting

Used to decline

As time went by...

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You readers, tell me, what title should I give to this poem?

TITLE by Kim Williams (thanks!)

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20 comments:

S. Susan Deborah said...

What happened to her . . .

Sometimes all that she needs is herself.

Dulce, sweetest I wonder what engages you heart and soul.

Joy always,
Susan

Felicitas said...

Whatever you call this, it's terrific!

Have a wonderful weekend dear Dulce!

Caio Fern said...

i loved you you did with this poem of yours ... really well written .
but sorry , Dulcissima .... i never give title not even to my works , i can't help you with this .

Caroline said...

I have been away too long... So nice to get my life back and come here. Your words (as always) fill me up. xoxo

Sam Liu said...

Dulce, you are without doubt a sublime observer of love's countless aspects, you can empathise and capture emotions with such skill, each of your beautiful poems leaves me perfectly in awe.

Man Named Kim said...

i love this piece. the title that come sot my mind is "Not Inclined"

Rebecca said...

Lovely sentiment, Dulce.

Nikki (Sarah) said...

In waiting...now becoming empowered...so much my own journey...your speak to my soul

steveroni said...
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Tammie Lee said...

how lovely that the lies have gone away.

Maha said...

i agree with Sam; it feels like you are holding a camera , zooming and doing zone-outs. That was a beautiful poem

The Girl With The Mousy Hair said...

Dear Dulce, I would call it ,Leaners and Liars. I know that is not really what it is about but it's such a clever little phrase " lies and leans ". I love it.

Toni M.M. said...

Dear Dulce,
whichever the title you choose, it's an absolutly pretty poem.
As you know, writing is not my best feature (I was born to numbers), so at least and luckily, we "mortals" can read well done things like your poems. If there was something like a "Champions League of Poems", you'd certainly should be the overwhelming winner.
Finally, I will dare to propose a title for this piece: "WAITING FOR YOUR EYES".

Take care, Sweetie!
Half a ton of kisses,
Toni

marie said...

"More than words" is a title I might use.

steveroni said...

OK Dulce, I suppose I WILL comment here. Title for this one:

WHERE AND WHEN....
or
NOW AND THEN
(I like better WHERE AND WHEN, though NOW AND THEN is probably more apropos.)

May I take this occasion to let you know how much I (and many, many others) admire your capability for putting in a unique order, those words which are so meaningful. Those words which so often harbor between their lines hidden thoughts, doings, desires, and life struggles, emotional and otherwise.

You have that knack of writing which challenges Peeps to read, think, interpret and wonder about the meanings of Dulce, the meaning of life itself.

One day you will enjoy what you are so aggressively seeking--what all desire--to love and be loved, for no other reason than that you are you. Dulce is Dulce.

Take Care, loved one!

LarryG said...

ahhh sweet one, there is always tomorrow...

Sheri said...

'the waiting ends'....
or maybe that's the title for my life, not your beautiful and tender poetry, dulce. you are a magnificent creature!

Dulçe ♥ said...

THANK YOU so much for these so meaningful comments. As always I am amazed by them.

I love all the suggested titles, you've given, but especially
"Not Inclined" by Kim and "The waiting ends" by Sheri.
They are the ones which somehow come nearer to the idea I tried to convey.
Hey!
This is great!
I think I'll register this 'NO Title' thing.
Again next Saturday?
;)

Hugs to you all.

Dulce

Man Named Kim said...

Yeah! I like being picked.

I think it's a great idea for a weekly post.

Gotta get to work, but see you soon!!

* said...

Beautiful poem. "Used to decline as time went by..." perfect lines, well wrought.