living room
Rain drops tapping on my window
As I look at your immutable
framed smile
Why
Cannot meet mine...
And I fix my eyes
On the ceiling
Mislaid in then and now
Hey you,
spider web…
Time to sigh,
and smirk.
________________________________________________posted for OSW
34 comments:
she is lost in her thoughts, her world ~
These times are good for the soul!
love this
nice. sublte...love the texture of details...the patter of the rain...the spider webs that cling in the corners that keep us...
i am reminded here of sir walter scott's "what a tangled web we do weave when first we practice to deceive" - which seems to fit so perfectly your beautiful words here, lady!!!
Ah! Every girl, from Manilla to Moscow to Memphis must have a couch on which she lay in abstract musing of all things romantic.
And in the corner above is that web, to keep the ceiling from falling Ah! Love!
The final touch of your 'word-painting'... tapping music of those raindrops.
Ah! PEACE!
so simple & beautifully put... excellent
I think that smile is inestimable. The image is Gorgeous.
oh, dear lady - forgot to tell you to hop over to words unspoken when you get a chance - check out "the game" - i think you'll like! ;)
I've talked to a few cobwebs now and again. Can relate, Dulce. The patter of rain sets the scene well. Lovely write
those quiet moments deep inside the inside of your head
you capture them well
"Mislaid in then and now...' I think I've been there. Nice weaving of the cobwebs, Dulce.
ah, those ubiquitous cobwebs... and i like this line:
"As I look at your immutable
framed smile"
I find cobwebs everywhere. I think they are good luck!!
Xo
spider webs of thought
why do you entrap me so?
someone comes for me
:D
"Mislaid in then and now" ...love this line sweet one!
I like "Hey you, spider web..."
To me, it makes the poem.
Good for you. Not one broom mentioned.
Lovely photo, and I like the "immutable/framed smile". Good one shot!
"Mislaid in then and now..." perfect line, Dulce. I love how this poem carries me into her musings.
Ah, I can see that cobweb too :) very beautiful.
My One Shot Poem
lovely picture, lovely verse :)
Whoops, you made me look up and, darn, if I don't need to get at the corners tomorrow. Shame on me, I see a couple of cobwebs!!! As always, you write beautifully.
....And a smile is not so hard to find afte reading such amazing comments, my dear friends...
Thank you so much... cobwebs... more than one.
Could use a broom... but then it'll come up again! So... I say > live and let live!
:-)
Dulce
I thought of something funny to say, but I'll refrain because this is kind of melancholy and I'd hate to ruin the mood.
Nice One Shot, Dulce!
"Mislaid in then and now..."
Marvelous line!
When immersed in one's mesmerizing thoughts, even the mundane surroundings appear oh so romantic...
But really, waiting SUCKS!
It's all so well expressed here, Dulce.. whimsical and beautiful!!
got to tell you...just love that blue flower header....and the poem...lost in her thoughts...it's nice sometimes....Hope you're doing great Dulce
These are the silent moments where... sometimes... we find a magic truth. I leave in silence, now...
:-)
Nevine
Wonderful!
Loved it, Dulce.
Sweet Dulce
Glorious gifted poet you are. Such sweet embrace of words in a mystical lyrical verse where our thoughts can drift to places of beauty and "live and let live." Your poetry is magical.
joanny
Dulce:
Such a common scene but extraordinarily crafted by your verse.
Calm and sober, what it is.
Joy always,
Susan
sometimes I don't get poetry, I must admit. I must read and re-read to get the meaning if I ever do. But there is such a good feeling I get in reading your verse even when my incompetence doesn't grasp the whole idea
Love.
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