standing before an orange sun
blazing and fleeing clouds
exhaling breath in vapour water
second in
second out
frozen nose
eyes not frowned
deeper in
softly out
a launching bird
distracts my misconception
of place and time.
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21 comments:
i am glad the bird ditracted you then...smiles....sounds of a chilly morn...
love that closing, that misconception follow me around, all the time
Hate the chills from the cold, but nice when there is a distraction.
I smiled when I read launching, thinking how my birds this minute are lunching.
Anyway, maybe your time / space continuum is the best misconception to hang out in. I like dreamworlds. :)
Really lovely, Dulce. I heard the bird's wings!
And your new photos are always a lovely exhalation theselves. Thanks for the sweetly soft art!
xoxo
this one has a hypnotising feel - I felt myself twisting into it "distracts my misconception
of place and time." - indeed! nicely done!
i'm with OT - it has a hypnotising quality and just love being in the moment with you..
Oh wow! "distracts my misconception" >excellent!
Love those last lines!
A blessed distraction for this "sensitive" Northeasterner, Dulce. Great piece.
Beautiful, meditative mood to this Dulce--the focus of the breath, the struggle always to get it right, to center. Enjoyed it much.
Love the end, great write :)
Gentle, with a surprise ending. Well done.
The finish of this is strong. Very nice write!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/10/the-sun-came-up-again-4/
Yes, funny how winter can affect us, and change our reality ~
Nice one ~
Great ending:
"distracts my misconception
of place and time"
And I LOVE that painting!
~Shawna
http://rosemarymint.wordpress.com/2012/01/09/crux-matter/
painted with the brush of an artist and a miriad of hues
Enjoyed. The words and Image go together well.
a poem that has left me in a 'place and time' to have some thoughts... your poem left me with reflecting some of them in this moment.
very nice write:)
~L
Interesting words here:
a launching bird
distracts my misconception
of place and time.
intriguing alignment of concepts and images.
Yes, it is dawn. Beautiful wordsand lovely rhythms that melt into the dawn itself.
I shall be back soon - I'm off to meet up with my sister and to swim with manatees.
This is ONE GOOD piece of poetry!
"Orange sun" I'm there.
Fleeing, blazing clouds. I 'see' them.
And breathing vapor-water, at first quickly, then deeper and slow...bird launching (2 words inspired)
The Pièce de résistance:
"...a launching bird
distracts my misconception
of place and time."
You ARE poet, Canary-Girl!
Thank you. PEACE!
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