Smoothly pulling her down
Perceiving this unknown
Unfamiliar sweetness
Cannot breathe
A feeling of no need
This relief
Really blue is this sea
Blue and deep indeed
The above blind light
Vanishing in this last goodbye
And it becomes all over
As she shuts her eyes.
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16 comments:
An unfamiliar sweetness vanishing...is a sad thought, pero el poema esta buenísimo.
Otra cosa, te mencione en un video ayer. lol
¡Que pases un buen fin de semana, primita! Abrazos...Ily
that relief is 'short lived'...smiles. nice write dulce...
Welcome home!
i've often heard that once you stop struggling against the water flowing into your lungs, it truly is a beautiful and peaceful ride, just as you have written...please tell me why she chose not to struggle??
your offering is always full of wonder and depth, just as you are, my dear friend :)
A short poem, but in only 5 stanzas, you completely absorb me and draw me deep into the world and the emotions you have expressed. Wonderful, vivid writing, Dulce :)
Missed you!
Hey, Dulce! I wish to comment more than "Welcome Home"...it is about the last lines:
"...last goodbye" means "new hello"?
..it becomes all over
As she shuts her eyes."
Maybe "all over" could mean "a new beginning" of the new life, on the "other side"? Hmmmm. Or am I again (sigh) wayyy off the track here. (I do believe in life after life, ya know!)
Peace and Love, Peep.
I love the feeling of not being able to breathe like this....
Short and deep... but nice.
Happy to see you here again.
oh, dear lady dulce! i...cannot breathe...a feeling of no need...this relief! how magnificent your deep blue blue words here! sweeping us all vanishing us all in that last goodbye! beautiful!!!
Tragically sweet! A lovely, haunting piece, Dulce.
I like this blue thoughts, the blue sea and this blue feelings you've written. Nice words Dulce. By the way, we missed you these days.
Welcome back!!
Dressing to kill
Lovely comments
Thank you all so much for visiting my bloggie!
;)
your words...always touch me...in a deep way..have a great day today...you deserve the absolute best.
You were missed while away. And sometimes we have to close our eyes... against ugliness... against beauty, even. We close our eyes... but it seems when we close them we see beyond what is there to see.
While we plunge into this very deep sea... I can feel your soul.
Big hugs, Sweetest.
Nevine
This sounds like a nightmare...Kinda creepy
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