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Tuesday, December 28

Admiring


You are not a thief
You are not deranged
But a peeping tom…
Or, are you not?

You are that bird
Hiding in a tree
Looking through 
   into my window
Needing to see me
As I start to get dressed 
Because you are obsessed

Red Lace by AexandraG
Say...
With my hips and legs
   And the way I walk
   And the way I talk
   And the way I wink
Although,
   shame...
   hardly ever at you 


But I know you observe me
Follow my track
I feel your presence
Though you are not there
When I look back

Yes, I know you admire me
   Every move I make... 
And  I pretend I am oblivious
But must admit
I love of yours...

That obsession
Unique admiration
Bordering a rather weird
   Perfection.



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Written for One Shot Wednesday

37 comments:

Bubba said...

Finally! A woman who understands me! (LOL!)

Nice piece, Dulce.

Dulçe ♥ said...

Oh please
C'mon
Are you not Eric
But Tom?
LOL
Thanks E.
:)

Bubba said...

Just an admirer of all beautiful things.

drybottomgirl said...

Very William Carlos Williams, and that sweet little bird...peeping in for admiration....excellent one shot :)

Claudia said...

..bordering a rather weird perfection.. this poem of yours dear dulce is also bordering a rather weird perfection...nice...

JStar said...

:)

dustus said...

Honest, teasing, and as suggestive as it is overt. Very interesting acknowledgment of oddity in the final lines.

Laura said...

love that last line!

moondustwriter said...

I like the way you phrase this - it is a little edgy but she likes it...

If her moves signify love then it is a harmonious obsession

always love the words of dear Dulce

Desert Rose said...

this one moved me Dulce..erotic, delicate and so much feminine..love this touch of beauty your words add to the verse..ELEGANT..:)

Anonymous said...

Interesting change of tempo in the third stanza, added pace to this quirky piece which I much enjoyed

Brian Miller said...

who doesnt want to be admired...as long as it does not get creapy, but i did not get that sense from this...rather more a playful sensuality

hedgewitch said...

The power of the dance, I think you've got it down here.To know someone wants you makes you see them in a unique light indeed--as other's have said, as long as its not creepy(!) Last line's the gem.

Anonymous said...

So unique and wonderfully written!

Unknown said...

"And I pretend I am oblivious"

I love this disclosure! I think we all walk with a secret knowledge of someone's interest in another..

Anthony Duce said...

I love this poem. I wonder sometime when drawing or painting from life, if the model isn’t sometimes, having similar thoughts.

Hope said...

I love it!

Anonymous said...

Hello! I was here, asking for friendship. ;) Would you like to follow each others blogs? Advance Happy New Year. :D

Tabitha.Montgomery said...

love these last few lines..

Yes, I know you admire me
Every move I make...
And I pretend I am oblivious
But must admit
I love of yours...

That obsession
Unique admiration
Bordering a rather weird
Perfection.

K said...

This is a very provocative piece.

aguja said...

The illustration and your poem go so well together ... and it is a cleverly constructed poem, besides.

S. Susan Deborah said...

Just loved this one. Don't we all like to be admired. I do, for sure eventhough, I pretend I don't (Winks). Dulce, we humans are so sweet. We say one thing and mean the other. You capture OUR essence so well.

Big hugs and much love,
Susan

Carrie Van Horn said...

Your beauty is flowing from this one Dulce....i love this....and i love your new layout! :-)

Monkey Man said...

Brings to mind a softer time when love's obession was not to capture but to admire. Wonderful piece.

Fate created my One Shot.

Ileana said...

Sensual bordering on scary, and I love it! Classic prima.

Soy yo, Ily...con otro nombre y blog, pero aquí estoy. Al fin te encuentro de nuevo.

Dulçe ♥ said...

Oh my!
Thanks for your sweet reactions-all surprising and again perfectly weird!

In fact, yes, everyone likes to be admired, but when that admiration becomes obsession, I don't think one could bear the situation for long.
At least I could not!

I wish I had the time to go and read all the posts blogging for One Shot, but I can't. I'd rather read a few thoroughly, you know.

:)
Hugs

Dulce

Steve Isaak said...

Romantic take on what could almost be seen as creepy - erotic, at times. Effective, superb piece.

RNSANE said...

I would think you have a whole world of admirers spying on you, dearest Dulce!

Alice in Wonderland said...

Loved this, Dulce!
I sort of found shades of Maya Angelou in it!
Pure perfection!

Unknown said...

now that is a nice obsession

Your writing is beautiful Dulce - so much feeling

Don Carlo said...

No doubt about--this is 'molto dolcissima'...

Obsession might be OK for some--for others it is serious illness, so perfectly weird.

Loved it!. Thank you.

Lu Ann said...

Auch!! Perfection!

Jerry said...

Did the bird have large talons?
sorry, that just showed up in my mind. Mood altering poem indeed...got me thinking...oh and by the way...Eric...behave.

Jhon Baker said...

very nice - more I cannot say without incriminating myself.

Yvonne Osborne said...

I'm a bit late, but I wanted to tell you how much I liked this One Shot. The peeping tom can be creepy but also erotic, as you so perfectly show us. Like a secret admirer, flattering yet unnerving. The birds have such a view, don't they?

Anonymous said...

Wow!! No wonder you have such admirers! :)
Lovely flow of words here, Dulce...
A very happy new year to you, my dear..

A Plain Observer said...

this was just great, Dulce!!! absolutamente hermoso!!!
So creative!