You might
get to know me
I might
get to know you
Or not
...
No more prisoners
of little ponds
Come swim in the transparent
Waters of my
Where lust is so, so sane
...
It’s not a suggestion
Nor an invitation
This is my contention.
...
Sense my desire
Smell my heat
And listen aroused
To my heart beats
As I approach your ear
I‘ll wrap my legs around you
While we swim
In my transparent
I’ll show you games
In other waters
You’ve never played
This is my transparent
...
Keep afloat
For with my passion
I can drown you
And so would I
Since I might well
Inundate myself
With my own ardour
...
If we dive
We’ll dive together
If you sink
I’ll give you my hand
If I sink
You can give me yours
And if you can’t
Don’t worry
I‘ll come
Up by myself…
For-after all
This is my
© Dulce
16 comments:
Ooo, I love this~ I love that, you are in control of the situation...after all it is your Lake!
brilliant~
~Calli
Um...I think you need to add a stronger reaction choice. "Cool" doesn't cover something as passionate and striking as this poem.
Throughout, you choose strong, even challenging, words to convey an immediacy and an open desire that the reader can feel and get swept up in.
*fans self*
Wonderful, Dulce!
Not a suggestion
Not an invitation
It is my contention.
Go get 'em girl! It is beautiful, Dulce. Your English (for a Spanish=speaking woman) is no less than excellent!
Here is an excerpt from a comment on Calli's blog today:
"....I love and read Dulce every day also, and of course, Shadow. You peeps lift my spirits daily--it is the goal of the true artist, to lift up the minds and hearts of others to God. (my opinion!)
After all, was it not God Who gave all of you these gifts? Thank you SO much for sharing your talents!"
Peace!
Evocative. Extremely!
When it's your lake you're the boss! Loved it. :)
Very sensual indeed.
Beautiful poem. The idea of swimming together with someone you love is delicious!
Thanks for pointing out the error.. i must have been half asleep when i was doing that post! ;P
Congrats!
Lines like these kept me going through this poem:
No more prisoners
of little ponds
Come swim in the transparent
Waters of my Lake
Where lust is so, so sane
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lust... sane??? okay, i'll go with that, heee heee heeee. lovely writing dulce!!!!!
I love the transparent lake.xx
brilliant! have loved this poem, girls girls and more girls, i will need an ocean for this treat.
this smart poem.
Wow:Great writing. No sadness here only wonder and joy and expectation.
You are lovely for apreciating my effort. Thank you all!!!
WOW!
So sensous, Dulce!
Love it!
Margie:)
Love this, full of passion and great memories, love the lines "If you sink I'll give you my hand" personal reasons really. A most enchanting poem and a fabo photo, oh yes a fabulous photo!
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