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Friday, August 14

55 words






(This is part II from post “Late Break up” dated Saturday 1st August.

So perhaps you'd better have a look at it first!?


LATE BREAK UP (PART II)


When Mrs Pale came in

She realized

the music came

from the stereo.

The closed piano

had the note which read:

'This is just to say goodbye.

Sorry, I feel

I don’t love you any more'.

Her face went pale with shock.

The pain in her chest and arm

made her collapse on the floor...


© Dulce Rosales

Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man ( Mr Knowitall)The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.


19 comments:

Dulçe ♥ said...

Sorry my friends
No happy ending this time either
:-)

anthonynorth said...

A nicely written painful moment.

Hootin Anni said...

Oh my....love it....tho sad it is.

Mine once again is shared. You need,as always, to click on the link at top or scroll down my entire Friday blog.

Have a great weekend.

steveroni said...

Rosales, you site is very interesting, as is your "55". I'm glad I came over to visit. It is fun visiting the "55"s which I never woud have found, were it not for Mr Know-It-All.

I copied youe URL

thank you.

Hootin Anni said...

Dulce: Thanks for inviting me to follow your blog! Which I have begun just now...I do enjoy your work.

:o)

steveroni said...

Rosales, I am a retired symphony violinist, who like to reminisce through story-telling. I have a personal "Canary Islands" ((musical) story which some day I would like to write you. It is too long for a comment, ya know?

Thanks for visiting my place on the www (What a Wonderful World), I have out your site on my blogroll. So, we shall meet again in this great cyber-world.

Thank you!

Dulçe ♥ said...

Thank you so much Steve
I'm really glad we've met!

Fandango said...

Sad what you humans do to each other. This romance thing is such a pain.
Great 55. Glad your with us.

Anonymous said...

Good job Dulce that really is a sad story in only 55 words, you should make a little book out of it!

Jessie said...

I enjoyed this -- so much is sad in 55 words, and much more is felt.
:-)
Thanks for sharing,
smiles,

Lou said...

I don't understand leaving notes of such a serious nature. He should have told her to her face..the CAD!

CJ said...

Your poems are lovely ---and your English nearly flawless. I like how you use works of art to compliment your poetry ---or maybe inspire it.

I responded to your comment on my Flash 55 HERE.

Dulçe ♥ said...

Thank you everybody for your comments.
Rafa,
writing a book on this might be interesting but so sad...

I must tell CJ
that first I write and then look for the appropriate picture which best fits my idea... And
It's to me really flattering to 'hear' my English is nearly flawless...

Love+smiles:)

Dr.John said...

Glad to see your hanging in there and doing well.
This is a great 55.

Sylvia said...

Oh, poor Mrs Pale! But then, the bell rang and it was the piano tuner. "Good morning, Mrs Pale", he said. "I heard a strange melody from this house. I thought that the piano could be discordant. I came to take a look!" He smiled.

G-Man said...

Very nicely done Dulce...
Excellent 55 My Dear!!!
Thank you for this Fine piece of creativity.
Please join us again, and have a Wonderful Week-End....G

Akelamalu said...

A very sad ending to your 55 excellently written.

Thanks for stopping by to read mine. x

Shadow said...

damn......

steveroni said...

Like Shadow--I enjoy a happy ending...maybe it means I am in denial of reality?

TTYL (means: Talk To You Later?)