(This is part II from post “Late Break up” dated Saturday 1st August.
So perhaps you'd better have a look at it first!?
LATE BREAK UP (PART II)
When Mrs Pale came in
She realized
the music
from the stereo.
The closed piano
had the note which read:
'This is just to say goodbye.
Sorry, I feel
I don’t love you any more'.
Her face went pale with shock.
The pain in her chest and arm
made her collapse on the floor...
© Dulce Rosales
Friday 55 Flash Fiction is brought to you by G-man ( Mr Knowitall)The idea is you write a story in exactly 55 words. If you want to take part pop over and let G-man know when you've posted your 55.
19 comments:
Sorry my friends
No happy ending this time either
:-)
A nicely written painful moment.
Oh my....love it....tho sad it is.
Mine once again is shared. You need,as always, to click on the link at top or scroll down my entire Friday blog.
Have a great weekend.
Rosales, you site is very interesting, as is your "55". I'm glad I came over to visit. It is fun visiting the "55"s which I never woud have found, were it not for Mr Know-It-All.
I copied youe URL
thank you.
Dulce: Thanks for inviting me to follow your blog! Which I have begun just now...I do enjoy your work.
:o)
Rosales, I am a retired symphony violinist, who like to reminisce through story-telling. I have a personal "Canary Islands" ((musical) story which some day I would like to write you. It is too long for a comment, ya know?
Thanks for visiting my place on the www (What a Wonderful World), I have out your site on my blogroll. So, we shall meet again in this great cyber-world.
Thank you!
Thank you so much Steve
I'm really glad we've met!
Sad what you humans do to each other. This romance thing is such a pain.
Great 55. Glad your with us.
Good job Dulce that really is a sad story in only 55 words, you should make a little book out of it!
I enjoyed this -- so much is sad in 55 words, and much more is felt.
:-)
Thanks for sharing,
smiles,
I don't understand leaving notes of such a serious nature. He should have told her to her face..the CAD!
Your poems are lovely ---and your English nearly flawless. I like how you use works of art to compliment your poetry ---or maybe inspire it.
I responded to your comment on my Flash 55 HERE.
Thank you everybody for your comments.
Rafa,
writing a book on this might be interesting but so sad...
I must tell CJ
that first I write and then look for the appropriate picture which best fits my idea... And
It's to me really flattering to 'hear' my English is nearly flawless...
Love+smiles:)
Glad to see your hanging in there and doing well.
This is a great 55.
Oh, poor Mrs Pale! But then, the bell rang and it was the piano tuner. "Good morning, Mrs Pale", he said. "I heard a strange melody from this house. I thought that the piano could be discordant. I came to take a look!" He smiled.
Very nicely done Dulce...
Excellent 55 My Dear!!!
Thank you for this Fine piece of creativity.
Please join us again, and have a Wonderful Week-End....G
A very sad ending to your 55 excellently written.
Thanks for stopping by to read mine. x
damn......
Like Shadow--I enjoy a happy ending...maybe it means I am in denial of reality?
TTYL (means: Talk To You Later?)
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